Tuesday, September 1, 2015

Chantelle W and Riley T "Bully" Summary Response

Summary Response Outline


Summary: No opinion- stick to the facts. No personal words (I, you, we, my, me, our, us, your)
  • Topic sentence: title, author, strong verb, main idea
“Bully” by Lee Hirsch tells how physical and verbal abuse from bullies scars one’s life.
  • Supporting ideas to prove main ideas
Due to living in a nightmare that they cannot escape, bullied teens try to eliminate the abuse in any way that they can, even by ending their own life.
  • Explanation of ideas
  • Concluding sentence: restate main idea
Clearly Hirsch presents a modern society problem that is scarring today’s youth and those closest to them.


Response:
  • Topic sentence: title “Bully”, author Lee Hirsch, strong verb, agree/disagree (correctly portrays/ incorrectly portrays)how bullying scars one’s life, because it can lead teens to self- harm and even suicide___________ and ______________: “Bully” by Lee Hirsch correctly portrays how bullying scars one’s life because it can lead teens to self-harm and even suicide.
  • Claim 1:
    • Set-up- In Murray County, Georgia, the community is trying to take a stand as bullying becomes a problem in their local schools, but the school board is claiming that they are doing everything they can to solve the problem.  
    • Evidence: Lead-in  “ quotation” (“,You are rich, respected, admired, beloved; you are happy, as once I was. No answer. I called again-    )
David Long, the father of Tyler Long who committed suicide, tells of his experiences with the school board, “There were numerous times that I had to leave work for situations that arose because of Tyler being bullied. Their attitude was we can’t stop kids from saying bad things.”(Hirsch)
    • Explanation of quotation to prove claim
The school staff tried to avoid being blamed for not doing anything about the bullying. When Tyler was beaten up by two kids, the school resources officer refused to press charges against the boys. Due to the lack of effort to stop the bullying, Tyler took his own life. The constant tormenting and humiliation was too much for Tyler to handle. The bullying damaged him to a point that he thought that there was no other option than to kill himself. Not only did the bullying affect Tyler’s life, but it also affected his family. No parent should ever have to go through their own child being bullied.
  • Counterclaim 1:
    • Set-up: However, in some cases of bullying, it can just be a few boys joking around, being childish and immature. Sometimes the children think they are being funny and joking around, but they are actually hurting someone. Adults can’t always control these things.
    • Evidence: Lead-in  “ quotation”
    One school staff member explains how children are sometimes insensitive to others and are not able to be controlled at all times. A teacher states that, “Kids will be kids, boys will be boys, they’re just cruel at this age.” (Hirsch)
    • Explanation of quotation to prove counterclaim
Teenage boys experience peer pressure everyday. If one person is bullying a kid, it sets off a chain reaction. Many boys don’t even know about the pain they are causing until it is too late. But this bullying is still causing many kids to harm themselves, even if the bullying wasn’t intentional.



  • Claim 2:
    • Set-up-
    • Evidence: Lead-in  “ quotation” (       )
    • Explanation of quotation to prove claim
  • Counterclaim 2: Although, ....
    • Set-up
    • Evidence: Lead-in  “ quotation” (       )
    • Explanation of quotation to prove counterclaim
  • What are the strengths/ flaws of this argument?
A common view is that bullying is just children messing around with each other. We cannot deny that some kinds of bullying aren’t intentional. Sometimes it is a joke for everyone involved. However, when the bullying is serious, it creates a traumatizing experience for the bullied. When a child is being bullied, they begin to believe the things they are being called. Some bullies believe that they aren’t a bully because they are not physically hurting the victim, but those words are still affecting the victim. This kind of bullying is verbal abuse, and can sometimes be more hurtful than physical abuse. From being beat up, to cyberbullying, and verbal abuse, bullying is a problem everywhere, and it won’t go away until people take a stand against it.   


  • Concluding sentence: restate main idea
Even if it might not seem like it, bullying affects children in many different ways. Bullying doesn’t just affect the child, but it affects everyone around them. Not only physical abuse affects them, but words hurt too, and can sometimes due more damage than physical abuse.

1 comment:

  1. Good work and nice concise summary. Make sure to punctuate the title correctly.

    Really good work on your claim and counterclaim- make sure to punctuate title correctly as well as cite quotes correctly " (Hirsch). Look at where the period goes.

    Work on your conclusion to come back to Hirsch and the movie.

    16/20

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